stargazer9927

Red: Grammar/spelling mistakes Blue: My comments Green: It would sound better like... SLURP! Bob sucked on his lollipop once again. He giggled at the noise that he made and did ...

Beautiful poem. I don't use puntuation in my poetry either so I know where you're coming from. Poetry is a form of art and it doesn't have the same rules ...

I've never read that book so perhaps there's some humor in it that I don't understand, but it looks great. You have amazing drawing skills and the poster itself is ...

I don't think I've ever seen an ABC poem on here. And I didn't know you could write one with just A-D. I loved it! Simple and sweet with so ...

Hello random person in whom I have never met before;) Welcome to Young Writer's Society. Any questions can be answered by me. Look at my profile. You may just find ...

This was beautiful and it was a great story. A lot of people feel like this. The only negative thing I would have to say about it would be it ...

I really like taking pictures of flowers. Whenever I see a flower I like and I happen to have my camera on me you can count on me taking a ...

I think this is a great idea but it needs a lot of work. I'll start by saying the whole thing was a bit confusing. You attempted to sum everything ...

Wow it's been a while since I've posted anything from this novel. But I got a new laptop a couple weeks ago and I ended up going through all my ...

Once again, great:) My dearest Robin. I’ll protect you with my life, Robin, with my whole being. From all the centuries I’ve lived, I’ve never met a woman as amazing ...

I loved this! It had humor, adventure, and romance all in one! And your writing was amazing! I hate Twilight, so let's hope this interests me more, and so far ...

I would suggest developoing your character a little more. I think you have a good start, but I don't really feel like I know him. Detail is extremely important. Like ...

Amazing! I must say I love your writing! I couldn't really find any nit pits with your writing because you seemed so good at it! I would have to say ...

That's awesome! I've never read your novella but the covers sure are cool. I envy people that can figure out how to make things like that. I just stick with ...

Thanks for all your reviews! I'll have to put the editing of this poem on my list of everything that needs to be edited since I posted it on YWS ...