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Woah I didn't even know this was you who wrote the story, until I saw tapatia's comment :B Forreal I wouldn't mind some of James myself. Guh. Your description of ...

Hello, there :D I'm going to have to first disagree with the above reviewer about the first line. It is unconventional, but it grabbed my attention, and I really like ...

I lovelovelove the lilt to the lines in your poems, and the usage of vocabulary. The meaning of your word choice is important, of course, but the sound alone of ...

I actually liked Catching Fire better, for whatever reason. I honestly don't know why. But I thought it was terrific. I honestly wouldn't have guessed that they'd have to repeat ...

NOTE : Okay, so this is my first real stab at anything even remotely creepy, for one. For another, if you are British, I hope you take no offense to ...

Okay, so I am confused a bit here. This feels a lot like its part of a larger piece, rather than a round piece of short fiction. There's nothing wrong ...

Hola there :D Oh, how I wished for him to be real... I would chuck this line. As some other people have said (so why am I saying this as ...

This is a really interesting idea you have here, and I love the opening. I just have a few bits of concrit. - I am too well acquainted with, along ...

Thanks so much, I'm glad you liked it :D Ahaha yeah, now that I've really started writing it, it's making me feel sad about Ethan kind of. And, yes, it ...

I really like the direction you're going with this so far. It really does have that Alice in Wonderland vibe to it. I like your descriptions and all the little ...

Ahaha. So this is the first chapter of what I'm thinking about doing for my NaNoWriMo, actually. I just got kind of excited. Feedback would be greatly appreciated :D -------------- ...

I would change absolutely nothing. This was breath taking, and so unique. Your prose is very poetic. I love your descriptions. They're so lush and vibrant. I'm in love with ...

Wow, what a beautiful story! I just really love your attention to detail --especially this line: It was early November. Just cold enough that the girl could be outside without ...