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Okay, I will try to fix it....I'm better with nature next nature story is going to be about a squirrel xD

Lol, it's okay.

Yeah, the last lines of each stanze don't rhyme....

*hugs* Thanks: :D

Thanks :)

Okay, I didn't think about Whitefang when I wrote, though now that I think about it it does resemble his book...Well anyways I'm going to post a revised edition of ...

Oh and about the Stallions mostly being the leaders of a herd, I thought I would mix it up a bit, men don't always have to be dominant xD. Well ...

Okay! Thanks for the criticism, it will really help me when I'm writing future stories.

Okay, I will try to qork on all those things. :)

Oh, and by the way, maw is another word for muzzle...

Okay, I will try to work those things out... :)