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Hey, The basic content and the descriptions are all perfect for a prologue. They lure a reader into the story. However, as a reader, there were two things that put ...

Request granted. Am going to review a work after a very long time. My apologies if it sucks. Nitpicks My suggestions are in red (delete those words). And my corrections ...

Hey Tiger! I'll be your reviewer for today :3 (I just love the sound of this line!) First of all I think this prologue has the potential to turn into ...

I love the first idea too. I think it will be easier for you to grab attention of the readers with the first one. The second one seems kinda close ...

First of all, I would like to say that you have a nice idea to build a novel upon. This definitely has the potential to become a great story. But ...

You, my girl, have captured the whole fantasy genre in this piece. I love the piece, but I hate the fact that fantasy has been restricted to just a few ...

First of all, the general impression- this was a really cool, thought provoking, somewhat deep piece in which you are trying to say that life is a circle? I like ...

I like the light yet deep feel of it. But I think you should give it a title, how would you feel if your parents left you nameless? I think ...

Haha that was really funny, nice,creative and innovative. I hate how the fantasy genre is considered to be all about vampires and werewolves now. I want to change how people ...

This poem was really well written with intricate descriptions and a really, really strong theme. Well my favorite stanza was this one- "He claws through a stampede in the halls, ...

oww this was a sweet poem. Though it's kind of one of those typical teenage poems (I write them a lot too. But it's not bad just saying that you ...

Ok so this was among the most well done poems here. Your maturity reflects in your poems. This poem was very polished (unlike many and mine) and it's flow was ...

Oh well forget the criticisms. You said that you couldn't get it out of your head, so just work on it and continue writing. Just get the idea out of ...

Hey this was as nice as it was before. The girl really has a dark past which disturbs me very much (that is a good thing!). But I am sorry ...

I really liked this. And I am the first one in YWS to like and comment on it. Though I would like to say that the girl's story was quite ...