spartacus

I will not critique this because its just beautifully great the way it is.The repetition of "I" is really good and this poem is really wonderfully written.Great job and hold ...

Tension stares through me bore holes in my back catch the gaze look away let your eyes fall to the ground where no awkwardness defines me sideways glances where are ...

This really touched because I'm going through the same thing. I wrote a poem about it called Coward,(its about my dad). I hope things get better.things get better or atleast ...

That was great :). I agree with everyone that was a good poem that took some time to figure but in a good way. Great job. I haven't seen a ...

Its mostly just in my eyes that this describes a coward because of people I know;) Thankyou!

Coward the coward fights with his fist he doesn't let others oppinions be thought in his eyes only he matters only his oppinions are valid and only he deserves a ...

Coward the coward fights with his fist he doesn't let others oppinions be thought in his eyes only he matters only his oppinions are valid and only he deserves a ...

Wow! This is good! At first,I was worried about the orientation but it pulled together. The visual coherence is vividly drawn.Bravo! There was really good formatting there but at first,the ...

I really liked this poem,it was great! The tempo is pretty good but the last stanza throws it off and makes it vulnerable. The "don't cry child" has more potential,although ...

Wow! The poem has really great rythme and a fantastic tempo. The tempo is even and well kept. It lacks visual coherence but is very good. Good job! ~spartacus~

This is truly great! I loved it and was amazed. It was riveting and had a strong visual coherence! The rythme and tempo were subtle and even. No rhymes which ...

this isn't bad like you said just not up to its full potential. It isn't structured very well and could use some work but has great visual coherence. It insuates ...

Your angelic, soft hair, and your shimmering brown eyes. Your sweet voice, flowing in the air, was what made me realize; There's more to tears than sadness, thats really visual ...

That was great. It had visual coherence and great description. I could see the meaning. The tempo is uneven and the rythme is good but unkept. Keep on writing! ~spartacus~

This is truly a vivid poem. The visual coherence is extraordinary and the description has me amazed. I was truly amazed as I practically saw everything in my mind. Great ...