sparrowrules

Caestela Watiers trembled with fear as she crouched on the wet ground. Her fingers and lips were dark purple. The air was extremely frigid. Her only protection from the cold ...

That was great. I loved your use of descriptive words. Without dreams; without a heart With no sense of cold and warmth, Not able to speak; not able to smile... ...

That was really good! I could feel the tension and the sadness. I would say (as the above poster said) to add structure and punctuation. I feel that could really ...

I have written a first draft of the entire story, I will be posting the chapters as I revise them. Please tell me what you think. If you think I ...

That was so emotional. You're very talented at getting what you want out in a short amount of time. You picked a good emotional subject. I think it would make ...

Wow! That was incredible! I felt like crying during some part of it! This is an AMAZING start. It was very... refreshing. Your grammar and spelling was very good. I ...

This is just a little story I started yesterday. It's going to be a type of "fairytale with a twist". The majourity of the story will take place when Jade ...

That was great! It was very suspenseful. I am interested in reading more. Tips: Add more description. Make everyone who reads your story feel like they are in the girl's ...

Well, that was.. interesting. I was pretty confused at the beginning. If I were you I would make the story more clear. Maybe you could explain more of why this ...

I believe that this poem has great potential! Just keep working at it a bit. I agree with the above post that it does seem a bit childish at some ...

Thanks for all the welcomes! Okay, now I'll answer some questions. I love a lot of movies. A few of my favorites are Pride and Prejudice, The Dark Knight, and ...

Hi there! :) I just found this forum. I'm looking forward to talking with you all! Cya around! :lol: