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Awesome!!! great back story, you listed everything that composess a good first chapter! its paced well, and has an interesting topic, not many people write aboout it anymore. im glad ...

Amazing introduction. you introduced the conflict without really addressing exactly what it is. Its mysterious annd hooks people in. In the next part make sure and include a seting, and ...

“Olivia wait up!” Katrina Shannon screamed as she came down the hallway trying to catch up. I watched as her stride lengthened, tiny frame moved faster, and dark blonde hair ...

It felt like you were trying to hard to make it perfect. I like your writing style and all the imagery you used, but its just one thing after another ...

I stepped out into the ruins of what used to be Time Square. Sadness filled my heart. In school they showed us picture of what it used to look like, ...

I love this story! the mystery keeps you in it! It gets so intense. I laughed when she yelled ARSEHOLE!" I like this story beacuse it already has a love ...

I'm completely in love with this! Its such a great story already it took the first sentence and i was hooked! It drags you in just like the undertow. The ...

Oh my goodness! This is the best poem i've ever read! The only thing that was wrong was the mispelled word I tell myself she's jelous its Jealous. Other than ...

First off i love it! but it is a little bit choppy. The first line kind of goes together but you could say the same thing but say it in ...

Her names Krissi Dallas. She's an AP english language arts teacher. She published her book herself last time, and now Tate Publishing has taken her on. So basically shes a ...

Thank you !

I sat there under the stars, my camera. The cool breeze blew my hair forward. Fireworks went off over head and I took a picture. Inside a battle was taking ...

Thanks.I know my spell, punctuation and grammar checks jacked up. And yeah don't really know where to put different paragraphs.

It works! In fact I think its better than the original song. I liked it because it goes with the same rythym. I found myself singing it! This is like ...

This left me wondering, its the kind of suspense every writer hopes to obtain. It left the questions in my mind "What is her past with Ethan?" and "What is ...