sophie_emma

Right, okay cool :) I didn't expect it to be perfect, I literally JUST wrote it. I don't know, It kind of reminded me of myself...just more broken. Lol. I'll ...

Thanks :) I need a good critic like you. My friends are all too 'wow it's amazingly perfect...' rarara. So yeah thanks. I wasn't sure about some of the bits ...

This is really good! Keep writing it, and your characters are really good, even though you haven't really introduced them properly. But you could do that later on. I want ...