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Thanks guys! What refreshingly honest replies. *grin* If I decide it's worth it I'll work on it. Thanks again, MademoiselleKool

Sorry, double-posted.

I forgot to mention this sentence, too: I had no idea what was happening, where I was being taken, and for once the goal-oriented girl was too frightened to think ...

Don't give up hope! I'm going to review this as soon as I ever can... I've read it and I liked it, but I'll give you a more detailed critique ...

Bick, sorry dude but the other critiquer is right. I looked it up a while ago and there should be a space after the ellipsis. However, just know that most ...

Thank you guys so much! Critiques are always welcome, even if they are only full of adoration and praise. Hey, I'm as human as the next girl and have a ...

Actually...I unintentionally, through writing Orson, gave him a quirk where he phrases questions as sentences. That is, it's a question but he inflects it like a sentence. I understand - ...

Well - the one major thing I noticed in this chapter (besides its awesomeness) was that Orson's speaking style seems to have veered towards colloquial. He was always very honest ...

“I don’t understand,” said Corseley after some length. “Do you now?” said Orson, smiling at the politician. Should be: "Don't you now?" because Orson is convirming what Corseley said, so ...

*Sigh sigh sob sob* That was so sad! Excellently written, of course, but saaaad. :( Only one thing I didn't like (other than what everybody else pointed out already): Brit's ...

Thanks so much for your great critiques! Snoink~ You expressed the deepest fear of my inner heart, haha. I was so worried they would be cheesy on paper. The thing ...

lol, plz rit more soon? And I thought the tense-swiching was cool, y'no? Cause it made it all cool 'n stuff. And werewolves rock, don't tak thm owt!!!!!! p.S. wtf's ...

Thank you all so much for INCREDIBLY helpful critiques. I think I'll keep on posting my new material, but add another chapter at the beginning that would keep investigating the ...

Here I am again! Ignore my other post, this is the real one. :) Well, maybe it's just me, but this really wasn't that confusing. Sure, I don't know all ...

Thanks for the great critiques, you lot! I love you all! I'll edit as soon as I ever can. It's so nice to be back...or have I said that before? ...