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In the second stanza, I believe that the child's "scream" is confusing, and the stanza would flow better if you exchanged that word with "laugh" or something simillar. In the ...

Construction Last night I left for the countryside. I wanted to feel immortal in my solitude, away from the loud demands of society. In a field I lay breathing the ...

Oh. Thanks for the help! I never realized i had put so many "and"s in it until it was pointed out.

I voted "Other." My favorite part of writing is rereading what I've written. I love to "taste" the words and feel the flow of my writing.

First of all, on the fourth line, "wether" should be spelled as "whether" I think the middle part of the poem is genius. The beginning and end could use a ...

First of all, i need this critiqued for my English class. Second of all, its framework is based off of the poem "Women Who Love Angels" by Judith Cofer. Thanks. ...

This is my critique for the prologue. Anything Prologue-related in my earlier critique can be forgotten, but i still advise changing the things i mentioned. "To the Warfront, something worth ...

I use both, but i prefer first person. I only use third person if i need to go into many of my character's minds to correctly tell the story. I ...

It's a nice story. The only real problem you have is the word "the." You use it too much. For example, the first sentence:"Rain poured down intensely from the grey, ...

"[ANNA stands up and accidently kicks a picture. Picks it up and sees that it is a picture of Jon. Talks to the picture.]" i don't know how you can ...

"Some professional brain surgeon makes this gadget and with it, will you let you know everything there is to know about the brain and its states." the middle part of ...

Rip it apart with criticisims. if you can. poems are hard to critique. i want friends, so if you want to be my friend i will never reject a request. ...

i think it's a nice poem. i suggest fixing your spelling of ignorance and adding commas and colons, etc.

we are the blinded. but don't take it personally. please critique as harshly as you can: The Blinded Yesterady we celebrated A holiday Of killing The only people Who owned ...

Crituque what you can....poems are hard to critique, but easy to enjoy. any feedback wanted. needed. But You Can't See In White galaxies float to your face, their wings dissolve ...