smorgishborg

The first government would be made up of the remaining people on earth. No doubt it's imperfect. These are people who would never normally be in politics. but eventually, they ...

It wasn't terrible, it wasn't bad, but it wasn't exceptional. And I think you could have done a good deal more with this. I recommend that you read some Walt ...

VI. We do three types of jobs. Cheap, quick, and good! I love this story very much. I find it fascinating how you were able to so effectively revolve a ...

It got a bit too wordy for me, and that was my only real problem. personified indifference Quick! Replace one of these words! adult responsibilities It's ugly, and it bogs ...

Well, here's part of the basis for my premise. If the human population has been wiped out, with only a small group still living, then there is no need for ...

Interesting Kylan, any argument helps. What I'd really like to hear is something enduring and idealist. My characters are trying to create a utopian society after a nuclear holocaust. The ...

* moderators, if this is not in the right place, I apologize* There's been a play lurking in the dark recesses of my mind for over two years. I've written ...

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[spoiler]Stuck I'm undecided about this word. It's not particularly elegant is it? in undercurrents of inevitable events. While the surface is clean and tranquil the fish in the depths are ...

A note about the title: It's interesting, but not significant. It would be especially effective if it worked two ways, not just one. (PM me if you don't know what ...

Terrible. If you can't see the forest from the inside of your navel, don't write poetry. My instinct wants me to leave it at that, but I'll try to tell ...

There are plenty of bizarre stories on YWS. But we branch out, we don't specialize. Now, This story was interesting. Thats about the sum total of what I can say ...

It didn't work for me, I'm afraid. It's a step or two away from being quite good, however... What bothered me the most were quite word choices, which really disrupted ...

Well done, and good luck. I've been away for a week, but I'll make sure to keep critiquing your chapters...

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