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Very nice, all very nice. I'm wondering if you wrote any of these, (I suspect the last?) or if you found them by yourself. Looks like a fun field trip. ...

*head in hands* Check out the spoiler. [spoiler]Taking Care of the Grandkids All of this should be in italics. Character descriptions often go before the immediate setting. At Rise: Lights ...

If nobody wants to critique: Below , then I hope you don't mind me asking you... :D

Well, Cade, I'm not sure this would fit snugly in even the most expansive definition of "prose poetry". But obviously, there is such a thing... (And this *hint hint* is ...

Below Michael stands completely still stage right. He is angry and depressed, and he is staring down in front of his feet. After a few seconds, Paul comes onstage left, ...

Oh the angst! Well, I can't really talk, as I'm enjoying a lead role in an upcoming production myself.... :D But I digress. This script is cute, and not altogether ...

I hope you write a love scene for Terri and Mark at the end! EDIT: It was fine...

What is there really to this poem? It's simple text, with nothing behind it. A potemkin village of a poem. It's not good enough to merely state your feelings or ...

I'm not a grammar nazi, and I had trouble with this... This merits a line-by-line critique, congratulations! + Separate your paragraphs. + Put apostrophes where they belong. + Their = ...

I think subtlety would help this piece quite a bit. Perhaps instead of describing the country/continent, you could describe the setting. In fact, you could show (as opposed to telling) ...

She wasn't born in the sea as other goddesses were, but she did grow up near one. Unlike Helen of Troy, no wars were fought over her, but men do ...

Second check in, because I've got a couple new projects, and because I feel like it. Non-Writing + I fenced my best in our last meet of the season, going ...

Good work!

Based on Kylan's fantastic comments, I've posted a revised addition. I'm not so sure it addresses everything he mentioned, so I'd like to get some feedback on what I still ...

Gadi, you're too much a poet. which made the car skid crosswise the pavement—it rained the night before (when Mary was still alive) and the asphalt was smitten with puddles. ...