smorgishborg

Lets try to keep this discussion to the pragmatic. The question asks whether of not (the United States)* should leave Iraq. It does not ask whether the war in Iraq ...

This is actually really clever, It wasn't unbelievably abstract- just cleverly phrased. A very strong work. Unfortunately, the first stanza is the best of the lot. The second is second ...

Icaruss is right, don't over complicate things to begin with. If you really do go through with this, it'll be because your focused on the music and the plot, and ...

I enjoyed this, although there were some overarching problems I had with clarity and such. I'd like to know where the story's going. Lets take this one for a ride ...

Hey, Suzanne! Invasion of the Penis Snatchers is a bit long, but I'd really appreciate it if you could take a look.

Recently, I've been busy choreographing a modern dance for a show at my school. the subject matter is Tibet, and China. The music is Tibetan pop and most of the ...

Yeah, keep it all in the past tense, that works with what Enys is saying. I think you should add more gore, because I don't think soldiers of the time ...

Crossing the Rubicon Can this topic be stickied? Or has it been made obsolete by the "crit for food" forum. I think this one's kinda fun...

Hey, Icaruss, Invasion of the Penis Snatchers hasn't gotten much attention. It could use your acid wit.

This is very nice, I appreciate the well written stage directions, although I suggest that you pick out a couple things to be specific about. Couple problems: There's little structure ...

Good news: You're a solid writer. Bad news: You need better material then this. There's hardly anything interesting in this story, it reads like a History Channel rerun, and merits ...

I'm not sure what kind of competition you'll have, but this might make several cuts. It was a fairly strong poem, but was weighed down by the first stanza, which ...

TheHangman by Maurice Ogden Eh, it didn't do it for me. There was nothing that really stood out- it just wasn't compelling in the way it needs to be. You ...

In my book, people who make revisions deserve critiques the most of all. I know my words are going to good use. Judging by everyone else's reviews, it seems that ...

No need to be harsh, you've got a good deal to work with here. in general I appreciated your subject matter and tone. The idea wasn't very clichéd, and you ...