smorgishborg

By the way, I hope you understand why your favorite sports team lost yesterday. It's because you didn't watch them, didn't even listen to the radio, you thought that checking ...

Interesting. [spoiler] Talking about these ? *** 1. The musty scent of old leather and old wood spilled over every crack in the saloon. not sure I like "spilled over". ...

Geraniums in Cairo - Inspired by Prompt One of Flemzo's contest . Other entries will follow soon, stay tuned. The biting wind had long since cleared everyone out of the ...

It's nice, but you shouldn't have had to explain the whole camel thing. I mean, it's a personal poem, but that kinda thing can be alluded to, and -why not?- ...

The dialogue is clichéd, the plot is nonextistant, I have no clue what "The State of Massachusetts" sounds like, your camera choices will give the viewer vertigo (written like a ...

Bogus! There is nothing that says that Haiku's need to be "mysterious". Whatever the genre, poems should be understandable. If you can't understand it, then perhaps it needs work. The ...

I agree with AOD that the second part trumps the first. It's more lively, with a real strong sense of character. It's my understanding that CARLOS does kill himself at ...

This poem comes off as a collection of overused analogies and metaphors, cobbled together so that they rhyme. There is little substance to the structure, little sustance to the word ...

Like poodle skirts and ex-relationships, this is best kept in the past. [spoiler]North Country I. A Case of the Mondays Monday at the office was a Monday like any other. ...

Edited for flow. [spoiler]Tonight my life takes it’s last sigh over the clear skies, [s]where the[/s] and clouds so high. Where birds soar over the golden glen s , I ...

All I hear is blah blah blah. Poems need to come to something. They need to arrive at a point, or go through a point, or be on their way ...

There is much more that could be done. [spoiler]ACT I SCENE 1 OPEN on an old man, CARLOS, standing center stage with his hands in the pockets of his overcoat. ...

Is this true, or partly true? [spoiler]This is a three minute screenplay that I wrote for my friend's dad. It's only the first draft so... yeah. It looks odd because ...

Mbeki is absolutely the problem. The UN recently issued a declaration stating that fair elections could not occur under the conditions that persist under Mugabe's reign of terror. The US ...

Weird title. Lets see... [spoiler]Characters: MARLENE DAVIS is a waitress at Chance’s Diner. She doesn’t mind the job, but wishes she had something more in her life. She gets the ...