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Enjoy. Or don't. But make sure to tell me, if that's the case. If this is good enough, I'll get to direct it in the spring!

Here's a exercise we did in English class a couple days ago. It's about form, style, and most crucially, the importance of your last line. The following is a poem ...

Swimming in my own fears mixed with sorrow Really? I mean, really? Please explain to me what that line means . It's one of those lines that's conjured out of ...

I can see emotion and potential in this, but it's not reaching anywhere near the potential that it deserves. The spacing is significantly better in the first version; the second ...

Ending line is awful and should be scrapped. It totally doesn't mesh with the rest of the poem, and it doesn't make enough sense to justify it being left in. ...

Ah, senior year is kinda interesting. Workload is the same-ish, but the real surprising thing is how collegial all the teachers suddenly are. "Yeah sure, get your work done whenever" ...

This is a poem which has that hint of sarcasm that I love to write/read. I think the sentiment is strong and relatable, what's left is to make the word ...

Exactly what are you trying to accomplish by writing "pretty random lol" as a subtitle? Seriously? Because this is a red flag for a poem written with little thought, and ...

What I like most about this is that it's evident you've put work into this poem. I see some solid attempts at unifying it into a theme, and articulating the ...

What did the cops find in Jeffery Dalhmer's freezer? Ben and Jerry! - Dave Barry's Guide to Guys *** When the third body high heels and nothing else tumbled from ...

Just like to give a shout out to all those who helped me edit Below , which was a script I wrote earlier this year for a theater conference. You ...

No no no no no no! This not how to write good poetry, let alone poetry in general. This is a generic, tired idea told in a generic, uninteresting, uninspired ...

The evening, I read a poem about something or another it ended in four lines and I felt thoroughly cheated of substance Agreement with Suzanne, whatever there was behind the ...

Thanks for the comments! *** KookieKatie: Really? I kinda see this as a conversation with oneself, not two people talking to each other. I chalk it up to paranoia. Incan: ...

Executive experience is a made up quantity. Experience doesn't guarentee anything. Jeffery Skilling, for example has plenty of executive experience. Kwamie Kilpatrick has more "executive experience" t