User avatar

smileforever

  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: A Jonas Love Story

    A Jonas Love Story Introduction The story starts at the beginning of summer vacation. Isabella, Hailey, and Gabriella are three girls that live in New Jersey. They are best friends ...

    Jan 6, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Prologue of my story

    I love all the adjectives you added in here. This is probably one of the best prologues I've read. You give a lot of details, but not too much that ...

    Jan 6, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: nvm 5

    I really liked this story. You had some really good lines in here. Just a few spelling errors, and that's it! But really, this blew me away. I could feel ...

    Jan 6, 2009


No, it's not that you didn't succeed. You accomplished a lot, but, if you want to touch people, don't concentrate so much on rhyme and metre. Think more about what you want to say instead of how you're saying it.
— LCDR Geordi La Forge