smallittlelegant

wooohow. First glance.. o_O Readers won't even try to read it. Break it up (paragraphs). It's bad for the eyes. I'm sorry, but that's the first "huge" thing i noticed. ...

Woohooo! I love this! Original! Unique! I didn't know that you could turn the blood sucking creatures into this one. Although I am a bit confused. Vampire is the correct ...

Ok, i got really confused with the first part. I was thinking jenna was crying because her father was dead. I got confused there. Yep. I'm really confused. Since the ...

wow. interesting. On the first chapter alone, you really caught my attention. Absolutely fantastic! Fabulous! Although there are some mistakes. Indirect mistakes. Although your words are amazingly sur

Wow. As in, Wow The story has just started, and now it wants me to come back for more. Cool. I like it. Interesting. aw, poor geek. I know just ...

your characters looked so real. and the story looked freaking great! Their conversation looked pretty real, as if I'm also in the story. Wow... 3D.... Pretty interesting too. Haven't seen ...

Unique, and very interesting. Your plot and synopsis alone already caught my attention. This is really awesome! Good idea starting the story with a letter. Try to revise the appearance ...

I got a bit confused. And to make the story much more vivid, do not jump into the action immediately. Describe everything, slowly but surely, so we readers can be ...

Nice! I love the mermaid part, the stories about them. I've always been a fan of mermaids, so for short, you totally got my attention! Loving father eh? nice! . ...

IT WAS NICE!!! but, the later part didn't much take my interest anymore.... So I guess... Well, make sure you vividly describe other things which revolves in the story.... The ...