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Re: These Violent Delights (short version)
The short version of this story. An entry for jaetwee's contest The Beginning of the End. 250 words maximum, ending with the same word you began with. I wrote the ...
Sep 9, 2011 -
Re: These Violent Delights
A FEW NOTES: This is the extended version for jaetwee's contest The Beginning of the End . Had to be 250 words exactly and end with the same word it ...
Sep 9, 2011 -
Re: Dear Nate,
It would be great if we could get everyone to reply to this and thank Nate. :) Thanks a bunch, Nate. You're awesome.
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: Pearls
Hey. :) Oh, what a beautiful poem. The style reminds me of Cummings (one of my favorite poets), the way your words are combinations of unexpected words. This whole poem ...
Jun 18, 2011 -
Re: Outlived
Hey. :) Let me set your mind at ease and say that you did very well on this haiku. You followed all the rules. You had five syllables on the ...
Jun 18, 2011 -
Re: My Beautiful World
There he goes my beautiful world where every bit of him is real is tangible is mine where his laugh is like a thunderclap and signals the coming of rain ...
May 21, 2011 -
Re: Perpetua
scrape the shavings of my heart from under your fingernails, you clawed from the inside of your car And sing the ABCs while you wash your soul, you sobered when ...
May 15, 2011 -
Re: Roses and Poetry
dear heart, it's summer and green in the garden the rose stem hangs (drooping, and darling, why is that?) from between Your grimace petals (velvet never knew Your lips) the ...
May 14, 2011 -
Re: In the House with Chicken Feet (2)
Hello, GryphonFledgling. I'm sleepthief. I think we've met, in the virtual sense, of course. And I think that this wasn't reviewed for four days because it's just so dang perfect. ...
May 14, 2011 -
Re: Dawn
Hi, futrauthr482! (Got a nickname? :) ) I'm sleepthief, and welcome to YWS! I'm fairly new myself. Um, I would love to review all of this, like, it would make ...
May 14, 2011 -
Re: Unity (1)
Hello, I'm sleepthief, and I'm fairly new so I'm still working out a reviewing system, but so far anything I add will be in bold and any comments I have ...
May 14, 2011 -
Re: we are the dead
He watched her letter burn in the darkness. Smoke wafted into the air, signaling to the world his crime. So he closed his eyes. The black canvas of his eyelids ...
May 6, 2011 -
Re: Hello and other introductions. . .
Thanks Griffinkeeper, Heather, and Lilymoore! You all are so nice. I never expected an online community to be this welcoming. :) Griffinkeeper: No, I haven't yet posted anything, but I'm ...
May 6, 2011 -
Re: Hello and other introductions. . .
Hi, everyone. I'm sleepthief, and I'm new. I've been a member for about a month but I just barely discovered this forum and so I thought I should formally introduce ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: The Darkest Passion
Hi. :) I was drawn to this by the compelling title. I enjoyed reading this poem. The hardest battle to win are the ones , when you feel heartless towards ...
May 4, 2011
