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@dante93 thank you! Much appreciated :)

I love this! The poem has an almost dream-like quality. I felt as if I was floating through the 'realm' of your mind as I read, being seduced and enticed ...

Thanks very much! I understand what you mean about the detail. It is a little vague. Specificity is something I need to work on. Thanks again :)

It's really good. Just a few points: Like a butterflies wingbeat - It should be 'butterfly's' as you're using the possessive case not the plural form of the word. hearing ...

Satin sheen, Soft green, gleaming, Rumpled from the hours I lay here, still, And watch the sunlight's patterns, Dancing, On the window sill; A distraction. Must keep from thinking, Becoming ...

Hello! I joined this site a few months ago, posted a poem and promptly forgot all about it. So this evening, while I'm supposed to be studying for exams, I ...

@Kafkaescence, thanks for the criticism and I've definitely taken into account what you've said. I was considering some of the points you raised already but I was unsure. Thanks for ...

Thank you so much! It's really encouraging to hear something like that because I've never thought I have any ability to write anything worth reading. I posted this on the ...

Satin sheen, softened green gleaming, rumpled, with the hours. I lay here still, and watch the sun’s patterns dancing, on the window sill; A distraction. Must keep from thinking, becoming ...