siobhan

You could have her meet someone from that world while she's wandering. Perhaps a deserter from one of the armies? He could be a boy if you wanted romance. Or ...

I think it's a good idea! It reminds me of The Goonies a little, which makes me happy! :) A few items of note, though. -I disagree that they should ...

I think it's a great start! I actually like the first line as an opener, quite a lot. I don't like the "nay" in it though. It doesn't fit with ...

I think that this is great start! I enjoyed it, and I'm glad she's not a werewolf. When I started reading this, I thought, "PFFFT I KNOW WHAT'S COMING." And ...