singdawg

In the middle of the ocean, at the middle of the world, there floats among the gentle, unceasing waves an almost unknown phenomenon of ponderous proportions. Atop the water grows ...

you need to work on your rhyming by avoiding words like "you" or "thing", lie and inside do not rhyme. I think "family that I can blame" works better. "I ...

You need to work on grammar, contstruction of your train of thought (pun intended) and your intended meaning.

sorry man, you gotta make it more interesting

The simplicity of this is ruined by it not having more flow. I felt that some combinations of words do not go together as well as they should, and if ...

I like this, I think a little longer length might have worked better to convey true anger, use more imagery.

Some of your adjectives like "black" "cold" ect need to be reworked, as do your choice for end rhymes which overuses patterns like.. bliss/kiss to/you ect ect

ending with a previously well used aphorism/maxim like "be the change you wish to see/be" just shows a lack of creativity, sorry.

Harry Potter will probably become a very famous classic novel, however it cannot be classified as classic now, since it is less than 20 years old.

why do you want to listen to music that reminds you of how shit life can be? listen to something positive.

holy editing is needed this is not romance if this is about your life, go get some help

Alright so, I think that this is a well written poem about , I like how you have shown progression of age through the stanzas too. I like the message, ...

In some darkened corner you sit alone, crying and beating your fists at fate, as if chained down in such a state, unaware and relatively unknown. Oh, the pain you ...

'It was a hot early summer morning" hot and early or it was early on a hot summer morning "when i left my house for what would be the most ...

sometimes I set my poem line lengths to deliberate syllable counts, normally 8 or 10. my favorite poem that I wrote follows a 8686 syllable count, however, i've never really ...