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Excellent! XD As other people have already said, the narrative is enjoyable. The dragon's character really comes through in the voice. Always a good thing. I liked how he compared ...

An interesting story. :) I liked the comparison of T. Rex to a mumbling homeless man... Are their eyeballs really only the size of tennis balls? o.O Remember to start ...

I really liked this. :) There were some errors in places that'll be an easy fix. Just proofread a little more (or have someone else proofread with more detail for ...

This is an alright start, but I think there are some things that you could do to make it even better. "I heard a loud crash when it made contact ...

An interesting set of topics... Really makes you think about what you're posting online. There are just a couple of things that I think could make it even better. FIRST ...

This definitely wasn't bad, and I get the sentiment behind it - I love music too... However, what cost you the most points in the contest was that, it was ...

This is a rather intriguing start. My only real nitpicks: "I specialize in most instruments." Maybe this is just another part of the quirky humor you have going on here, ...

"The other sat on the floor, gazing dreamily up at the large wall in front of her. She had strange hair, which seemed to simmer in thousands of different colours. ...

A good start... My notes going through: "... more about the Test way more than you!" After 'test', there should be some kind of punctuation. If they pass the castle ...

Your thrashing has arrived, sir. *salutes* My notes going through: "As it’s been a long time" - Tense issue? Should be 'as it had been a long time' or something ...

In an effort to procrastinate NaNoWriMo, I decided to review something! ^^ This wasn't bad. My notes going through: "Stella was extremely glad for having a small chest, making it ...

I really enjoyed this. ^^ My notes going through: "I knew my mum only did it it for the best, but I knew I even repulsed her, my own mother!" ...

I read through this pretty quickly, so I don't have much to specifically point out... But this was really good! Oodles better than part one, which was pretty good to ...

o.O That's it?! No! I want more! It was so good! DX Seriously, really great description, great start to a story, and I really want to know what happens. T-T ...

I would like to politely disagree with formertywcwriter. I don't think you need to make it too obvious they're in the future from the very beginning. Part of the fun ...