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I agree with a lot of what LadyKixRox said. I think this story could be good, but it needs some polishing. A little proofreading, a little clarification in some places, ...

Definitely morbid, but is there really such a thing as 'too' morbid? Morbidness is in the eye of the beholder, I suppose. ;) Yes, it's morbid, but a lot of ...

'She had to keep breathing heavily to stop herself going hysterical, as her wrapped hands shakily removed the hood from over her head. Her blonde plaits fell in front of ...

This is an interesting premise, but there are quite a few typos/grammatical errors you might want to watch out for. Not sure, but is six year old supposed to be ...