silented1

i wish i cared more.. to write a good poem.. but i don't.. if i wanted to work i would i'd get that nice job at walmart.. but it doesn't ...

its me ahh !

haha when i read the title i was thinking beating / ignore ... this hits very close to home for me....haha... here at my house... there is no one here...usually.. ...

the repetition of blank is a present didn't go to well for me.. i didn't like that... and when you used occasionally that threw it off... the rhyme was okay...i'm ...

ehhh did anything else happen ? and who was with you ? and other spefic details would be nice.. don't know if this sounds stupid but it wasn't actually about ...

lets say if i changed the title to the beach ? like i origionally had it...then it'd be a bit harder lol...

ehhh did anything else happen ? and who was with you ? and other spefic details would be nice.. i myself didn't like it... sorry.. but here where i live.. ...

thanks aqua...because i never say that they are waves and i never give a scene .. i figured i'd keep going with the beach.. to make sure its there as ...

heya I loveed it, inspired by me? cool thankyou silented 1, yours is very good. :) well done! it is I who must thank you... your poem will always be ...

haha sorry man... the uncertanity thing.. should be casually.. haha i guess i forgot to change it lol

i'm quite sorry for asking.. but may i have some more reviews ?

i would love this in haiku form ! it seems like a perfect fit for a haiku.... and if you don't know what a haiku is.. its 3 lines... first ...

flowing forth unknowingly following the pack the rest, the norm, only to end at the same place The Beach. left to their own accord crashing casually, creating a soothing tune ...

also i forgot to say that this inspried me too...thank you..its a rather good poem .. to get one thinking on a subject matter of which to write on .. ...

Temptation drags, them onto the limestone rocks. Catching sandcastles on the way through, But it doesn’t care it neither feels nor seeks pain, but it has enemies like me and ...