silented1

Imagry would be nice. Metaphores too(well more).Similes would work well here to. You want to make it as much of a thrill living as you do writing that the reader ...

Your flow is nice. I like the transition from distance to one's self then back to the distance theme. Somethings I don't like: Such as your phrasing."Moments from now I'll ...

What I don't like is that there isn't much of a message to it... For me atleast...And I didn't like how you said "A moment in time/ There's a moment ...

It sort of looks like vash the stampeed from Trigun... Who is this? Itachi?

Haha, I like the twist at the end, I really enjoyed it. And the rhythem seems okay to me. Also I did like how you built up to an "OMG ...

What I didn't like was that there was little smooth transition from the darkness to the light and all the things inbetween... What I did like was that it slowly ...

Why not good bye ethan? For a title... If you're looking or a title that is. You should capitalize all or none of your I's in a poem. ""i'll never ...

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Okay so it only took me 6 months to make one. Okay here I go... I am going to forget a lot of you.. so sorry. Kamas- just being a ...

When a mod drops by, Lock this please.

I used to think... That I had no true reason for living other than mere exsistance. Then I was told to come to YWS... Where I met amazing and fantastic ...

Just finished making one for Silented1, he asked on chat. Thank you becks! :D

You should review a bit more before posting...Please. 3:1 is a good ratio.

In studying the smoking gun that is poetry, I've came across things such as assonance and repetition, end rhyme and alliteration. These things I know not, the mechanics and workings ...

When, where, what??? And killing yourself, isn't that a bit dramatic? :D And, also, good! You like Twilight, but I didn't know you liked it. I haven't seen where you ...