silented1

You reuse a lot of the words... I don't like it, it became boring and annoying at the end. Sorry. I do think you could do without some of the ...

Thank you for not trying to rhyme!!! thank you!Now I like this poem because it doesn't have/need a setting, it doesn't go all around the map. It stays here you ...

screams are heard I thought it was an empty void and that the air was the only sound? Also, I like the darkness tranquility relationship there. I think it's nice ...

I think you should say forget the blood upon their floor. To me that has a better effect. That's for the second stanza one. It's good in the 4th stanza. ...

I like how you kept everything in comparason. Good job. As for your rhyme? It was okay, I didn't like it too much but it wasn't terrorible. So nice there, ...

It has a lot of common and boring images like: I felt the blood flow as I slit my wrists I mean you're hurting yourself(in the poem) yet this is ...

I don't like how it's jagged like in the poem, not the greatest of structure. Also your imagery is nice and I do like where it takes us. So good ...

What I don't like is the repition of it is becoming in stanza 5 and the it is in the 3rd stanza. They aren't really needed. If you used commas ...

Hmm I do know. And I got to say I didn't feel the anger here, nor the sarrow. and i don't know what to do when i feel that the ...

Okay, you got no periods here and that makes it one big sentence. Nope. Selfish cold heart is a bit cliche. Also this poem seems a bit abrupt to me. ...

I thought the ending with the little face was funny. One thing I don't like is that you never really give us anything to connect with. You say they insulted ...

Nice its prety good, one thing thugh, you don't describe her. And I love it. It's different from all the other poetry in the sense we don't get a description ...

I stare at the wall but my mind wonders into the depths of my thoughts, and though I can't help but wonder if he feels the same way when he ...

I like how it transitions from "Ohhh I love you in these ways" to "What the hell am I to you". Like the repeated metaphore that also changes at the ...

I like your rhyme, it sort of ringed in my head as I read this. I like the music metaphore type of thing in the second stanza. I don't like ...