silented1

puddles everywhere!

You got it going, I agree with snoink on the imagery and ideas of this poem are good, great really. But what I do not like is the lack of ...

Don't destroy my selfesteem too much, please.

There is little to this stone town, too small of stores to buy anything useful and too few to go out of business. It's a place where brick roads fade ...

His tongue is shrivled and burned from enjoying too much sour candy. When he was a kid, his dad owned a convienent store, and one day while he gorged himself ...

"Open your eyes, or we will open them for you." This doesn't match. Forceful people in a world where everything is just happening to you, and you reacting. I don't ...

I think you should switch the title with the description.

This isn't too bad, it's emotional and what not. My problems with this is that there's no imagery.

This is kinda boring. There's no message really, besides one we would want to tack on ourselves, there's nothing to think of, to enjoy, to relate to- other than the ...

The moon decomposes into a white gas that feeds through the kitchen sink, and through the windows. Giving the darkness a trim of light. Creating unexplored boundries beyond the glowing ...

The only thing I can say to your edited version is that the imagery doesn't reflect what I think you're talking about. The love you share with this person. The ...

vampyre your review is done. Cupcake, your's too.

And you can drink the dead sea. -line removed due to laziness- That salt is your sin? I like this. It's an interesting idea and a bit more tangable than ...

their skin is gray and wrinkled, rippling under our hands It's hard to picture this because I am not sure if you mean the rings, the tusks, the knives. If ...

Here I sit as your last breath has been taken. Gone are the days filled with joy, Gone are the days when you would console me, when we were both ...