silented1

Thank you for your comment. =] But I am going to lock this.

=o fancy. Psychology to make peoples join! Smart. Lol.

every organ has a price, every man's life has a tag, all blood goes on the market, tell me, what is your wage, fair assailant. Tell me! for what is ...

The beautiful girl Immediate tell over show. with the white-blonde hair, the one in the black bikini: Oh, so now it's a different girl? she works for a corrupt man. ...

First off, your rhyme, it did feel a bit forced. You may want to work on it. Which means keep rhyming until it works naturally. But are you sure for ...

and I try to clear my mind. So much raw emotion I felt, that I feel I’ve lost. you may want to give us some better imagery, like similes or ...

May I have an *actual* review, please?

Okay, so the rhyme wasn't too forced, which is good. Except for the last line. We don't really see too much action to this, like the description of the story ...

Let me go back. To my sun-soaked childhood. To tears, my fears and despair. .> Where did it go? I miss it. Take me back to the time where the ...

Eddie! Well I can't review poetry, but this was good. I liked it. :) =p it's perfectly alright lav =].

What's happening here? We don't really know. The best thinng I could come up with an alien abduction.. >.> "I can still see you" Why couldn't you see them? "Nothing ...

Sunlight treads on midnight blue paths to new leaves of green, to barks of brown and animals of shade. Looking up at rolling gray, against the black ground, running on ...

Again, it's good except for the repetition like in your other poem. =p

I'm going to start with what I find easiest first. I'm melting in your onyx black lipstick smeared across my The line break there is a bit bad, if you ...

Hmm, well you should try using punctation or grammar, between lines to make the flow easier or atleast transition words or soemthing like that. That's all I got, sorry.