silented1

Well, your poem doesn't move. It's describing one moment in time, pretty boring, eh? And this is very list like, again pretty boring.

Hmm, how does this totally original title relate to this.

Will there be a time where we can just call in and not contribute? like every other radio show..? Like the shout out time.

Meh, I don't get any motion and you should use some imagery. Like some images or something for us to grab onto and relate with. good luck, keep writing. Silented1.

Originally for lilymoore's contest, I liked it, so I decided to post. Enjoy. Marked; You're marked—deadly, beautiful, the best type of disease. You taste of grit, salt of the earth, ...

I'll try my hand at de-lazy-ifing myself for the night. So we're just reviewing everything?

I don’t want life to be easy I want the chaos and the rain That doesn't really go with life and insanity and chaos? Unless it's like a thunder storm ...

Thank you all, I have little to no experiance when it comes to editing a poem. I'd like it very much so to know if I'm doing it right.

please forgive my broken heart syndrome, for the memories, for my weakened heart. I am sorry, for how we never got to use that swing set, which is now buried ...

You came to me today looking so innocent as you say you're sorry. You swiched tense. Did you mean you said? You tell me you still want to be friends ...

I wrote this poem in remembrance of a friend. He died in a car crash when he was six years old. Tonight we will dance in lazy pirouettes So you're ...

It way too repetitive, I think you know where you repeated things too much.( EVERYWHERE ) I didn't even read it, when you take out the epic repetitiveness, PM me, ...

YWS's facebook is easier to use than Facebook's facebook! It's true! I was there!

Hey christy, one thing I don't like is the repitition of memories in your 3rd and 4th stanzas, it seems off to me, like there's not enough words inbetween, but ...

Sitting in the darkness I write this as I think That if I never met you Would in these tears I sink? I know what you're trying to say but ...