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Empty bottles full of stories. Robert m. drake and r.h.sin

Rhythm is hard to teach because it's felt in the sentences. A tip is that informational parts of words tend to be stressed so like: Importantly is a word where ...

Bump.

Thank you. I am writing poetry still, I am learning to paint and draw too. I also have worked on a novel but only one chapter so far. And Tenyo! ...

Hello. I am old YWSer. How are things these days?

Thanks.

I'll hit you back with one on poetry, if you'd like.

Thanks in advance, and if you'd like, I'll do one in return too. Poetry only though. Sorry.

I wish to hear your serious tone of seriousness.

I didn't read it, but just by looking at the amount of words between your repeated phrases tells me they are too repetitive. When you repeat something, try to build ...

I am came home late last night, around midnight, I had been walking among the moon and the stars, the only ones who could contest with my shadow and perhaps ...

When the moon is bright They howl with might They bite and they fight! At midnight. When the hour is near They smirk and they leer There's so much to ...

My father has large hands, he could wrap his fingers around my head and pick me up with one arm. He could also throw me, but if I closed my ...

I like the concept it's pretty cool, but you're lacking imagery and that would give these two things real contrast. You need to show them how they would affect the ...

Okay, so after reading the first stanza, I get all this "tool" phrasing, I call it tool phrasing because it has to be used by your images and imagery to ...