shiney1

I've never heard a death poem told this way before. I see what you are trying to convey. TheTruthLiesWithin summed up all of the "physical" needs that the poem had. ...

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Very nice poem! It is catchy, and fun to read fast, so the sounds blend together. And very good tone. I think the ending is cute, and it stops you ...

I understand this piece pretty well. It is not so confusing that you don't get the main idea that is trying to be portrayed. I would like to know why ...

Very nice story! Have not heard one like it before. I usually do not read such long stories, but when I saw it was about horses, I just could not ...

That was very nice, and had great description, which I love. Painted a good picture of what was going on physically and psychologically. Neat!

Nice! short and sweet, and it makes you think. Though, i think that if you expanded on it, it could be a little deeper, and would give the reader more ...

Very nice and deep! Full of great description and emotion. Just practice spelling out words instead of using contractions, it helps the flow and the mood. Great work!

Very nice! Now it has me wondering about my 13-year-old self *laugh*. The rhyme was not stressed like it is in other songs and poems; they fit in well. It ...

Very good! I think you captured many of the main features in both novels. Bravo on Animal Farm! I also think that you could add fire to one of the ...