shineondiamondeyes

Intersting idea. Expand on it, add some description and you got the makings of a good story. But word of advice, don't get to carried away. make sure there is ...

SO is there a prolouge for this? I don't know some of the comments were confusing. i like this story and it was well written but it had no lure. ...

Thats was simply wonderfully horrible! (That is a complement) I don't really get into horror but it really wasn't scary just sort of numbing and gripping. It was totally amazing ...

All right thaks for the help. I've punched it into a better processer and checked the spelling and followed most of your recomendations. So how do I post the edited ...

So for all the people who read my lost post, this is a little longer and its a little more thought out, but it isn't the same story. Also, as ...

Totally dig this chapter more then the last. Its sweet!! Just a couple errors this time around. Not as much spelling and grammer. But I don't understand why the first ...

So great story so far. I'm about to head over and check out chapter two but before i do i have a couple of comments. First I think its a ...

Thanks everyone so much. I know this was really short but I only could devote so much time to it. So I guess I can work on length and stuff. ...

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