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Re: Shadow Box Chronicles.
This is only my second post. I did my best to check my grammar, but it isn't my fortay! If you can, look for my prologue, to give you an ...
Jan 7, 2009 -
Re: N/A
This is a longer piece and I only have a minute to critique ( my apologies! ) “The regularity in which crime is committed, especially murder, is sad really,” my ...
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: Breaking Dawn Parody
This was the best. Even though I don't know you. I love you for making it. You should actually make it a little movie and put it on youtube or ...
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: Runaway : The Journey of thieves {chapter 3}
I will start by saying, you have very little to critique, this piece is near flawless, and very captivating. “Sorry. I’m part cat, so I usually the urge to cough ...
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: The Trianlge Effect
Looks like every one has touched on most everything, so I will just give my opinion here and there. When I got to school the next day I was ready ...
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: in the shower.
I have a lot of poetry like this. Words written carelessly because that was how I felt. They mean a lot even when they are simple. I especially like the ...
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: Bloodlust - Preface
As I am less the perfect when it comes to my own grammatical critiquing, I will probably will just be critiquing on the flow of your piece. Why did he ...
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: Shakes you warmly by the hand.....
I wouldn't say I am new to YWS, but I am recently active. I've only ever posted one piece here ,and I would say by now it is lost in ...
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: Define that Simile!
Because they are small and jagged. The trees are like stones...
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: Indunian Story
Every bone in my body ached, bones I didn’t know I had were screaming at me to stop running, for the love of Stikle, stop running. The only things keeping ...
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: Prologue of my story
There were so many critiques( you must be loved Haruno!) that I apologize for any repeat critiques. I am not fabulous when it comes to catching grammatical errors, but I'll ...
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: Instinct chapter three
I don't have enough time to do the entire thing ( which I liked, btw :) ) But I will make it a point to touch on as much as ...
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: Because - Chap. 1 (Edited)
It looks like I can't do much in the way of grammatical critiquing, but I will say that I do like the sound of this.
Dec 9, 2008 -
Re: Unique ways to creat names.
Oh have a character names Calbien D'Lumier, and Lumier means Light in French.
Dec 2, 2008 -
Re: Unique ways to creat names.
Here are a few I have came up with from ingredients or other odd things Tabasio - (Tabasco if you change the c to an i ) Very Italian, I ...
Dec 2, 2008