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Thank you very much :D As the poem is so personal to me, it's really good to have positive feedback about it. Thanks again xxx

Don’t cry, it won’t change a thing She’s gone and you can’t bring her back She was so young, so innocent Maybe God saw her beauty and wanted her for ...

Dammit. I became really attached to her.

Lol! :D

Wow, I really, really like that! :D I just loved it all. One question, does she survive? Janey x

Sadly, no, I am not the girl. :roll: Unfortunately I don't have that much confidence. She's just a figment of my imagination. :D Janey

Thanks for your comments, I made alterations where you mentioned. :D

Squinting into my tiny compact mirror, I pouted my lips and slid more gloss over them. “Don’t you think that’s enough, babe!” Lily laughed, “That’s at least the fifth layer ...

I really like that. The emotions are so strong and it actually made me cry :cry: . Well done!

*Gasp* They are just really amazing.

Mmm, cookies!

Cadmium, thank you for your comments. I changed the 'Forever' part you recommended, Their pity burns into my back. Down, down, the flowers fall. Skim past my dress. The dress ...

Love it. I also like the way you're dissing chavs and the like...!

Can I live without your love? No. With your absence you split my heart in two, I feel the congregation's eyes upon me, Tears burn my eyes. Their pity burns ...