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Re: Chapter One of Duty Calls Part Two
Rodax perked up. It was his daughter, then, was it? The blonde from the pictures? Well this was interesting... --- NICE USE OF LANGUAGE He felt a rising tide of ...
Dec 4, 2007 -
Re: UPDATED:Chapter 1 of Duty Calls Part One
Politician’s offices are all the same; even on Antina. --- MAYBE EXPLAIN WHERE ANTINA IS? Every 8 pictures or so --- USE WORDS FOR NUMBERS BELOW 100 Looking closer, Rodax ...
Dec 4, 2007 -
Re: Lady Ifrit: Chapter I: Sanctuary
Hey, good story - but. . . *laughs* yeah, there's ALWAYS a but, I found the "he, him, his" repetitive. . . in the first paragraph alone, there are 8 ...
Dec 4, 2007