scotty.knows

Thanks so much for the reviews! I made too many changes when I posted it on the website- should have left it the way it was. I'll post more of ...

Awww... :thud: the wolf dies. It was an interesting piece and I was engaged, but you started a lot- read: too many- sentences with the pronoun "I". Just as a ...

Not bad, not bad at all. I kept expecting that the girl's mother would be a 3-eyed vampire-zombie-mutant-werewolf-freak and that was why all the girls were frightened. When I found ...

Title: I don't know... something like Brutal Measures Genre: Action/Adventure/David Morrell-esque Summary: Genetically-engineered assassin, Echo-17, is in training to be a heartless, unforgiving kille

This is my scary Halloween story. Warning: you will be creeped out. “I hate you! I’ll always hate you!” Mary screamed as tears ran down her face. “Well if you ...

Hah! That was great. Don't think that by putting "hah" I thought it was cute and lame. For being only 13, you sure wrote a pretty creepy story. It didn't ...

Lol, I'm a rebel Christian too, and boy does that really tick people off. And the only times I ever punch people out is when they're picking on people. Stay ...

That was really unique. I've tried to write stories from dreams before, but they always turn out muddled and incomprehensible. You managed to make your dream into a fairly understandable ...

Hey, this is looking good. It read smoothly and I found it pretty interesting. Cambia Kitty15 covered most of the grammar/composition errors, so I'll leave you alone as far as ...

Well I read the whole thing, unlike someone, as I am not imposed by large walls of text. On this website, the font on the pages is really small so ...

Hey, good job. This was written very well and it flowed fairly evenly. Just one complaint: Your dialog needs more paragraphs. The man lets out a guttural laugh in hearing ...

The shoulders are a little stiff; round them out a little more. This guy isn't standing at attention on the parade ground, He's showing off his pieces. The legs could ...

Actually, yeah. Dialogue doesn't make it all. I would be going psycho if somebody was attacking my girlfriend on the other end of the phone; this guy just sounds a ...

Chapter One On the rolling thunder and pouring rain I’m coming on like a hurricane White lightning’s flashing across the sky You’re only young but you’re gonna die It was ...

Galatea is right; too much of a plot can be a bad thing. I've done both when writing novels. I wrote a long one a few years back, about 120,000 ...