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I’m staring at the sidewalk, watching the cracks pass below me like an escalator. My feet trudge onward, pushing up little bits of the thin snow cover at the toes. ...

Is it too long?

I only found one mistake though i wasn't really looking. Ella--or Mrs. Carwn--lives a few blocks away from me. Instead of red brick apartment complexes, there are small, narrow houses. ...

I loved this. I would give it a huge critique but it seems that has already been done. I read over what everbody else said and it covered what I ...

This was pretty good. I'm a sucker for murder stories though. I do agree, she should have fought him. I wouldn't mind more info on his background, his childhood, what's ...

I can't even critique this. It gave me goosebumps. It was great. You could make it better. But it is very beautiful.

I’ve spaced it out how I think it should be and added any comments about anything I think needed fixing, changing or anything I particularly liked. Dialogue always needs a ...

You sound really interesting. I don't know why. and you have cute smile :D welcome to the site.

The Boy Who Could Have Been Noé “A star is born, it lives and it dies, just like people.” Dash motioned up at the sky, his back dug into the ...

I really want critique on this, I want to know if you like the idea. If you find spelling and grammar mistakes don't hesitate to tell me, I don't know ...

Over the next few weeks he came in everyday at the same time and had a scotch everyday and then left silently in the blink of an eye, always leaving ...

She studies herself. Skin, legs, arms and hair bare their secrets tot he mirror. She sees her eyes; their black pits gleam with strength and compassion and something else. Something ...

Lol, I sound obbsessive, but I sorta am about Jasper and Alice. In one of the books, probably Twilight, it was said that Jasper and Alice were married. So it's ...

I was sat opposite him half dozing and half watching him fiddle with his weapons, cleaning his knives and sharpening his arrows. He saw me watching and smiled, then in ...

I didn't like this, not exactly sure why. maybe it's your spelling and puncuation. or your lack of capital letters. and it's too stephanie meyer-ish.