sarebear

Hi Deanie, This is a nice poem. My major issue with it is that it's not poem-y enough. Not to be vague or anything. I guess for me, your first ...

Hiya Form So...I think this is a very beautiful poem. While I don't agree with it, it is very well written and definitely thought provoking. I loved your opening stanza-- ...

Paulie (Hermes) He smiled when he had finished speaking, and just then a loud bell rang across the camp. I had been so busy listening to him that I hadn't ...

Hi Audy, This is...interesting. And kinda depressing too. Mostly depressing. Nevertheless, I definitely understand your purpose here. I like your intro a lot--the beginning two lines are really very n

You get a mangled TV remote control. Unfortunately, it no longer works. But you might be able to use it to turn off your little sister. -inserts head to look ...

Hi rysa, First of all, if you'll allow my boldness, I would just like to go through and give you some grammatical corrections (in addition to stylistic nitpicks). Things I ...

Hi Charity, Very nice poem you have here--well written, intriguing, not at all cliche. I feel like I've never read it before, which is unusual these nice work on that! ...

"Timothy, don't be like that." I was almost pleading with him. "Don't worry. I don't mind. I can listen." He just shook his head. "Timothy." "Paulie?" "You can talk to ...

All evening and I was trying to decide what was I thankful for? My family, of course but anything else? If there was, I couldn’t find it. So why did ...

Okeydokey...down to work. So, I definitely agree with Kyllorac about the line breaks. Too much. If I were you (which I'm not) I would simply eliminate about half of your ...

Hi L----I mean, STICHES :) So....this is totally awesome. Totally reflects your personality, I can totally hear you reading it aloud. Actually, this isn't really much of a review as ...

Hiya Lizzie, Yeah...I know some people who fit that description....but oh well. I'm dorky, absentminded and clumsy too, and I assure you I'm not named Lizzie. Well now, welcome to ...

You get a cream soda. -inserts coin-

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Oooh....I love it. Simple, cute, perfect--and, of course, deliciously morbid. Actually, this isn't much of a review in that I just like this piece a lot. I like that it's ...