sarebear

Hi God, Overall I liked this. One thing: as every tongue hangs loose. I thought this disrupted the flow of your poem. You could have showed slightly more rather than ...

Hi Nate, There's a bit of a problem. I created it and unchecked the box, but when I clicked begin I got this page: Maybe you can help. Sarebear

Hi First of all, this is really great! I like it a lot! One thing: I can almost taste it's tumbling oceans. now the earthquakes start, I can feel the ...

I really enjoyed this picture. I would go back and try to make it just a weensy bit neater (you could make the crystal look more real by trimming the ...

Hi Josh, Welcome to YWS! I'll be your reviewer for today. First of all, I agree with mizz about showing rather than telling. Take the first line. You come out ...

Hi Fairy, I loved this! I disagree that a period in the middle of a line is a problem. It is part of the poem and adds to its uniqueness. ...

Hi Ras Done like a real cartoonist! I want to know too: what did you use to write and outline and what to color in. Are these really enlarged or ...

At the risk of sounding like a jerk, this shouldn't be on the site right now. Before publishing, you need to: 1. Capitalize 2. Punctuate properly 3. THINK ABOUT WHAT ...

Hi, Sarebear here to review First of all, nitpicks. My hand trembled with shock, causing the pain to build more and more in my head. Get a hold of yourself. ...

Me likey! The flow of the words was very nice. I might cut out some of the question marks, but that's just aesthetic. I was slightly confuzzled by the italicized ...

Mermaids are not evil how dare you say so curiousvampire!

Hi Guys, This is something I drew in science class today with the only writing utensil available: a purple pen. I do ballet and this is a pose called attitude ...

This is pretty good. I would break up some of the lines. Also, don't center it. It makes it kind of hard to read. I suffer every second of your ...

I guess I didn't really understand kind of cunfuzzled me. I didn't get what was happening. Maybe I'm stupid, but could you clarify a bit? Thanks. Sarebear

Hi, I was wondering if you were interested. Here is the link to my poem: It's called Hate. and I could really use a review! I was hoping you wouldn't ...