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Hi, Okay, so I really liked this. I have only one comment: I don't like the girl's outfit. Something about the style and color...maybe try a different outfit. Something less ...

Hi, Okay, so my first comment is that this sounds more like song lyrics than a poem. I love the last two lines, they would be great for the chorus ...

Hey skins, I'm back for more! I have completed chapter 2 of For the Love of God and was wondering if you wanted to review it. I'll give you a ...

Huggles coming up! You like fiction, so here goes. My story is called For the Love of God. As you can probably tell it's a Romantic Novel. I just posted ...

A sliver of silver, a river of light. Cascading down my bed and onto the floor. I search for the source... ...there! A brilliant orb of diamond fire piercing the ...

Hi guys, Prepare for the second installment! If you haven't read the first chapter, go read it, or this will make no sense! Here's the link to chapter 1: Chapter ...

Hi, Okay, the first thing you should do is proof-read. Capitalize your eyes, add some punctuation. I agree with Kid that you should eliminate repetition. Plead and also I would ...

Hi, I really enjoyed this. The only part I didn't love was the first line. The lack of punctuation unnerved me. Did you mean: "Fortuitous? Not the king?" or "Fortuitous, ...

Uh, all I really see is lord voldemort...I'm not sure who this is. Unless the mystery person really has a top lip that is rumpled and a bottom lip that ...

Hi, I definitely enjoyed reading this. However, I wasn't sure exactly what I was reading? Why did you title it Cicada? What does it have to do with Cicadas? I ...

Hi, Okay, so the first two pictures are the same subjects. I like the second one better because of the contrasts. For the first one, if you're going to stand ...

Hi Nova, Nice poem. I like your use of comedy! But i will die. That is innevitable. But my heart is quite inheritable. I shall release my seeds, into the ...

They cower as I stalk past the power that is mine at last. They mutter hello but don’t meet my eyes and though I know they muffle the cries. The ...

Have you ridden the bus to infinity? Take care as you mount; it never slows you’ll ride along the milky way as every star in the night sky glows. The ...

Hi Isha, First of all this is great! I feel the emotions very clearly. A few nitpicks: I steal a quick glance at Jesse, our eyes lock for a moment ...