sarbear94

Love the hidden humor in this! It's very creative and interesting, even for just an IM conversation. It definitely gives a fun twist to a classic story. I wouldn't edit ...

The emotion was conveyed perfectly, and I can't really find any nit picks that megsug hasn't already pointed out. Your word choice was impressive, and conveyed your message well. Its ...

I'm a little confused, but it's pretty well written. I would explain a little more about the past between your character and Wilma. Why was the character's drift away from ...

You need an 's' at the end of 'bore' (bores holes in my back) Set the word "awkwardness" apart from the rest. I have a thing for formatting works differently ...

Ok, some nit-pick stuff... annoying Karsh further by his formality... Further annoying Karsh with his formality. Try to make up a different word for "unicorn." Whenever I hear this I ...

It's a great piece and I love the descriptions, but I do believe you're in the wrong category. Try calling it a narrative instead. Poetry does not have to be ...