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Re: Thirst
Hey Diane and on behalf of... well, myself, I would like to welcome you to YWS! You can call me Stella, and I shall be your critiquer this afternoon. I. ...
Aug 11, 2008 -
Re: Looking at myself
I loved the anger and feeling in this piece, and it was well-written, but it still needs a lot of revising. I dug my arm with my nails, Pulling hard ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Thirst
... Crits? I may be harsh. The way you write doesn't flow. Typos everywhere and it's just not smooth. Your descriptions are pretty point blank. Your grammar is lacking, and ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Looking at myself
Tarnished.
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Drew a book cover for twilight
Im going to be COMPLETELY HONEST. I am a huuuge fan of Twilight, I even go to Stephanie Meyer concerts and book release parties, And yes, Im a boy. I ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Drew a book cover for twilight
how i wish i could draw like that The bottom is beautiful, but the top twilight thing is a bit eek Yeah haha I know! I got so angry and ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: When I am all alone.
It's really good poem but you need to be more descriptive. But I'm struggling with the same thing called "painting a picture'. You have to use adjectives to describe the ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Random Abstract
I love the colors you used, they stand out so well :lol:. I just love the caption you use with this drawing. :lol: I just love it it's awsome haha ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Drew a book cover for twilight
Tarnished.
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Misery Lane
"As we walked on the beach, Hand in hand. Our eyes would reach, Toes wiggled in sand." I liked this part ^-^ It was so cute! Anyways, I was quite ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Unobserved
"I cower in the corner, unobserved. Just a figment of your imagination, Until you bring me to life." This is the first thing that caught my eye. You really expressed ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: lost in death
I thought it was really good^-^ Rhyming poems we're my least favorites but....your poem made me like these kind of poems XD thanks
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Someone cold as you
Drip! Drop! Drip drop! [clever hook] It's raining I thought to myself [thoughts are usually put in quotations but maybe you ignored this purposely? But I've also seen it without ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Someone cold as you
Welcome to the YWS! If You have any questions about the site or need help finding something, feel free to PM me. First of all, you haven't done any reviews, ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Someone cold as you
even if you do it's doesn’t change the minds of others it doesn’t change my mind either because you This part got me a little confused. I've no idea what ...
Aug 9, 2008
