saily.kiwalkar

Hi! I was too absorbed in the poem to find mistakes. I'm not good at this, but the expressive nature of your poem is impressive. I liked the following lines... ...

Hi! Honestly I'm hopelessly romantic. I loved your poem. I liked the second paragraph especially. I agree with zaneman. You can use the suggestion. Keep writing!

Hey! Welcome to YWS I think you need yo use punctuation marks. Without the use of punctuation the flow doesn't seem write. But otherwise the poem is really good. Keep ...

Hi! I loved your poem. The opposing ideas have been expressed well. I think you could change 'wondrous joys' to something better. It doesn't go with 'deceitful lies.' The third ...

I looked into your eyes, And the world seemed to swirl, The beauty in them was immense, And they appeared so intense. I stared at them. They were full of ...

Hi! That is a nice one. It definitely feels just the same when someone close to you hurts you, not caring and not even understanding you for once. I liked ...

I watch the raindrops. They lash against the window joyously Wasn’t it the same when we had first met? The cool air was stinging me. My hands were numb with ...

Hi! I liked your poem. The first stanza though could get better. Mandorelute is right. It isn't clear enough. I must say that the second and the fourth stanza are ...

Hi! The poem is a nice one. It is simple and I really enjoyed reading it. I agree with darko.demark666, especially about the second stanza. Its good but you can ...

Hello, This is definitely a very good poem. I especially loved second paragraph. The flow of the poem is good. Keep writing!

Hi! Well, I can see the anger flowing through your words. A nice poem and it certainly delivers the message straight. I think that is how exactly a girl feels ...

Hi dogs! It was a nice and a simple poem. Childhood days are certainly the most beautiful days in one's life. Apart from the mistakes mentioned, I think that it ...

I keep humming each day, Looking at the path you may take one day. Knowing deep in my heart… That you would come looking for me And sweep me into ...

I saw your back turn. I saw you walking away from me. Your every step was a piercing stab in my heart. I saw your handsome figure disappear as you ...

This is just a part of a piece I want to write in memory of my grandpa. I would love to get as many reviews as possible. MY GRANDFATHER I ...