rumblythunderxox

So, I've just spent two and a half hours straight on reading your novel and if you posted more I'd read more. This story is brilliant, your writing is brilliant, ...

I really liked it, it went kinda fast, there was a lot of dialouge which wasn't needed, like ordering the pizza. but everything else was great. Dont't doubt yourself, keep ...

Hey! Okay first and most importantly, stop worrying about the grammer, write with your heart first then your head. Or else you'll go crazy and you'll never finish what you ...

This seemed like it was taken out of story, not poetry. Maybe you should try writing a story instead =)

That was nice, I can connect with you there. Actually I think everyone who has been bullied or felt alone in their life can relate with this work. I used ...

Im sorry but i didn't get it. I mean you have a way with your words, I just was... confussed. I didn't reallyget what was going on or what the ...

Chapter four Snow The whole day I felt everything, everything she was feeling. I felt her curiosity and excitement as we watched the soldiers training in air combat. Her happiness ...

That was amazing. I couldnt stop ready everything was laid out very well. Why havent you written more? It was soo darn good. I think you should talk a wee ...

Thanks a lot! I know my grammar and spelling is great but i always leave that till my story is complete. I always write first, edit later. But thanks so ...

I love the brotherly relationship! Haha! Okay what can i say about this chapter. I liked it a lot better then the first one. It was more interesting, more action, ...

I really liked it, your very descriptive your dialouge is A+. Overall i give it a 9/10. I didn't give it all ten points because even though it was remakably ...

Just so everyone knows, I will be posting more tonight. Probably in a few hours so i hope i get lots of reviews!

Chapter one is up too! I would read that before you read this. Chapter two Snow My days were blended together, but they were good. And they were mostly of ...

Thanks! I'll probably post two more chapters tonight, maybe three! So stayed tuned.

Reread it outloud Some parts go by so quickly, like for example I was reading and jumped a paragraph and Nina is in labour? Wow slow down a wee bit, ...