rothwise

I just want to write that I completely love this. It feels so...edgy and rugged in poetry ways in sense that it flows like a broken jigsaw puzzle. That is ...

You've probably heard all these critiques before from the comments, but hey, I'll contribute a little... Silly me, I'm back here again Holding on to something that I want far ...

Even if this is a song, you'll notice most songs are written in four lined stanzas, perhaps you can figure out some way to change all of them evenly to ...

Thank you for pointing out my mistake Other One, I'll go ahead and change it right away. I'm glad you liked the chapter ^^ Ooh, you've got a point for ...

Chapter Two I walk quietly out of the dorm room, casting a glance at Lacey before shutting the door behind me. I’m in my PJ’s, my blue ducky pajama bottoms, ...

Very sweet poem, and I really enjoyed reading it. I just want to point out little grammatical errors for you is all. I miss you. I miss knowing you were ...

I love it! It was a beautiful poem. Just a couple points to hit on... Beautiful beyond compare, A scarlet rose in bloom, Your eyes are bright, your face as ...

I liked the actual poem, I found it funny actually! It's just the rhyme scheme that threw me off. It doesn't match in syllable numbers at all. I like the ...

Part One Chapter One “Please don’t make me go!” I wail, clutching Xavier’s shirt. “Señorita, do not make me do this.” Xavier pries my fingers off his neatly pressed top ...

Hello! I liked this poem - just a couple of things for you to watch. Watch capitalization, and watch your commas. You have some that aren't needed in some places, ...

Surely not the worst written! Not close. I do love this, a lot. Isn't it funny how our best works are done when we're barely thinking about what we're writing, ...

When I first read the title I was like "Hmm.......Let me go check this out." Needless to say I love the title, really. The poem itself? I'm kind of wavering ...

I really do like this a lot! It's fabulous, really. I'll admit that it made me giggle all the way through it, and then getting to the end made me ...

:~: CHAPTER ONE :~: Silver, white and blue cheer leading top. Blue and white cheer leading shorts. Silver socks, blue and silver sneakers. Brushed teeth, foundation, eye shadow. Mascara, eyeliner, ...

only one thing i think you should change, and that is that in the second line it should be "too" :) other than that I found everything perfectly fine! I ...