Young Writers Society

This poem has a very clear image of a sort of parasitic relationship. You have a lot of lines which contain "I" and "you" which make it somewhat repetitive. Lines ...

I love how detailed this is. I especially like "slender hands. . .snapped between a finger and a thumb". The only criticism I have is that I cannot see the ...

I loved this so much!! You really made this imaginable! I especially like the lines "trembling, lips blue, you hover at poolside" and "this slab of landlocked ocean". It's easy ...

I'm sure you've heard this before but you have a very dramatic writing style, which I find similar to Poe (that sounds corny, sorry). I really like your word choices! ...

This isn't really much of a review, because I don't have any criticism. I loved this so much. I'm not sure what you're meaning for this poem was, but I ...

I'm all for poems that discuss the United States' treatment of the middle east (as I'm guessing this is doing, please correct me if I'm wrong). In your first line ...

This reminded me a lot of The House on Mango Street with its details and domestic feeling. There was a lot of nostalgia in this and it made me reflect ...

First off, I love this poem. I feel as though the narrator is feeling relaxed. They feel different, and S/he doesn't want to talk about anything, doesn't want to think ...

Very nice! It immediately makes my think of someone in a rural area maybe (prairie?) and they're trapped in a house, maybe physically or by fear of the dark outside. ...

Very nice! I didn't notice any grammar mistakes (maybe because I wasn't really looking for any). You're descriptions made it very easy to imagine seeing what the narrator saw. The ...