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Third stanza encapsulates what I think about the whole issue. Good work. I'm really into sports and in sports, this can be quite an issue. The SF Giants recorded an ...

Hey! This starts out simply, but then it somehow descends into confusion and something a bit murky and hard to pin down as a feeling. I guess that represents diving ...

We reserve the right to deny pigs the right to become invisible. This is just one of those lines I fall in love with when I read them. I mean ...

I agree with the above commenter, very good advice. Personally, I think this is a bit short and I was confused here: I was two-years-old when I was adopted ; ...

*Applause* now that that's out of the way, The Choice Is there anybody out there, who’ll hear my urgent words, Of a foolish species’ failure, to make a better world? ...

This is such a sweet and emotional poem, but it doesn't come off as sappy or cliche'd, which is really cool. It does leave a lot of questions in my ...

Hi. I liked this story, I have a taste for good fun positive stuff so it's fine. I didn't think it was overly romantic, just a nice night out. This ...

Wow, this is really emotional and well-thought-out. I'm curious to learn more about the characters. I noticed some typos like putting a period before 'she said' in a sentence instead ...

I can't find much to critique. I'm not the best of poets myself and I think this one is structured and written well. They are the kings of selfishness The ...

Hi! Split this up into paragraphs and fix the grammar so it's easy to read. I didn't understand the end of the paragraph, what's milk or paper? I don't get ...

It was funny and intriguing! However, the interior monologue of the MC needs to be broken up into much shorter paragraphs. As it is, it's hard to read. There are ...

Wow. I like it a lot. I didn't get why you said "Please..." or "sleep", I mean I don't see what they add, except as showing how tired/confused the narrator ...

so cool! I agree, this is very inspiring. I'm so tired of the nightmares and chasing the light. It's time to make some changes, time to set things right. Another ...

I'd use sentence punctuation and case (i.e. don't capitalize every word) and spell out the words, without using U and that stuff--it makes the poem seem more real. Also, spell ...

Hahaha, good job? The ending looks like something out of a farce comedy, somehow. Anyway, the only major correction I can make is this: “Heyy, Liz , im on ma ...