refinedchaos13

I'm not going to repeat what everyone else has already said. I think you should work on details and take into consideration what the other reviews say. I couldn't really ...

I'm not going to repeat what everyone has already said, but I do wish you'd add a little more detail. I can't really picture what's happening which is important; atleast ...

I'm not going to repeat what everyone has already said. But I do wish you'd add a little bit of detail just so I can form a mental picture of ...

i think your story is really good. The only thing I would think to change is that just the language in which Sam says stuff, just doesn't sound like him. ...