redpen123

‘Just go with it’ and laugh out loud It’s not every day that you find a guy pretending to be married in order to pick up chicks at a local ...

I really enjoyed reading this poem. I liked how you used other words for a vague description; "I wore the dress of fire" is a great example. This way I ...

I agree with everyone else- straying from the structure was a bit of a disappointment and it broke up my rhythm of reading it. But this has so much potential! ...

It's humbling to see a poem written about a protractor. Normally it's hard for me to read poems about mundane things, but this is so well written that it works. ...

I agree that this does need to be added to. It's frustrating to be left hanging lol! But there is powerful emotion started so once you get in the same ...

I really like your style of writing; it's very original. With that said, I too agree that there should be more explanations of why they were fighting and maybe a ...

I really liked how you gave a window of what Christmas has become for our generation. The words have deep sincerity and truth, though I wish it weren't so. I'm ...

Wow, this is extremely powerful! I can't put my finger on one thing; the whole poem is amazing. I feel there could be many different interpretations, though, so don't get ...

Thanks for the critique! I wrote this poem on a whim, and just to let you know, I'm not anorexic. Sometimes I just like to capture the emotion of certain ...

I learn to love color I learn to love sound I see many whispers When you're not around I feel the long strides That music completes Sometimes I feel fragile ...

Wow! That was amazing...and very intense. You really captured emotion- I could never tell you had writer's block haha! The only overall comment is that it's kind of long, so ...