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Re: if i were her
and it was a two way street when it was only one I like this line a lot. It's simple but it explains things. These are good lyrics, but I ...
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Re: Frogskin
i really liked this poem! It was cute, and simple, showing the feelings of a little kid. The way you described frogs almost made me want to hold one. my ...
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Re: Shiver
A thump in my chest, Which puts me off-guard - Throws me off-beat. I really like this, how simple it is but really deep at the same time. I also ...
Jun 12, 2011 -
Re: The Governor's Fortune (R51C contest)
I thought this was amazing! I was hooked the whole time. There weren't any boring parts, as far as I noticed. :D I loved your descriptions-I could clearly see what ...
Jun 11, 2011 -
Re: If I was nice I wouldn't be a villan
Wow, this is good! I like how you show how mean he is. Like instead of saying something like, "I am a terrible person," you describe all the people in ...
Jun 11, 2011 -
Re: Your Good Isn't Good Enough (contest)
One of the things I like about this is the way the MC describes trying to understand math. It was easy to feel a connection to him, because I struggled ...
Jun 11, 2011 -
Re: The Princess and the Stones Prologue
I like this. It's simple and gives enough info to understand what's happening, but in a way that's interesting. I think it was a cool idea to have them discussing ...
Jun 11, 2011 -
Re: My Life As A Teenage Dragon: Chapter One
This is a pretty good story so far! I'm not really good at reviews, but here's a couple things I thought could make it better. This might just be me, ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: The End
This is a good story idea! I was hooked the whole time. I think it would make it better if you gave a little more background information, like talk about ...
Jun 9, 2011 -
Re: Dead Inside
I thought this was amazing. I've never thought of zombies as having personalities, being able to have conversations. It really changes my point of view. I like the part when ...
Jun 7, 2011 -
Re: Hey there Delilah
There aren't a lot of stories I've read about the relationship between brothers and sisters, so I think this was really interesting and fun to read. I liked how Chris ...
Jun 7, 2011 -
Re: Blue Sky
Wow. This is really good! I love how you used the color blue to express the way he was feeling. I like the end, where he realizes that blue doesn't ...
Jun 7, 2011 -
Re: Bear, Swan, 1984
This was a good short story, and I enjoyed reading it. The descriptions were beautiful! It did seem a little more poetic at times, but I love poetry. I got ...
Jun 7, 2011
